#TeaserTues – Vested in Her – Take 2

Illict #TeaserTues Vested In Her Except for your reading enjoyment.

I have reworked this story since I originally wrote it during Camp Nano July. Let’s say I remember doing three edits on it since then. That’s a lot in two months. It’s off at my editor now she’s scheduled to look at it next month. Wish me luck!

Edits

  1. A read through to write up my index cards on characters and settings. Worked on tense, added missing words, looked for the wrong word being used, looked for plot holes, and worked on flow.
  2. Added more character and setting depth. Worked on tense.
  3. A read through to write up my index cards on story. Worked on anything that popped up.

Vested in Her 7-5-16

Chapter One

Haven bounced across the cracked linoleum floor to answer the call of the beeping oven. She retrieved the surprise she had baked for her friends who were all crowded around a small wobbly legged table in her parent’s kitchen.

“Haven, that smells like heaven. You’re going to make some guy a great old lady one day.” Chrome said.

His older brother Gas smiled, his nut-brown eyes flickered menacingly and he laughed. “We all know that won’t be you, Chrome.”

The other guys around the table burst into laughter.

Chrome lowered his bright red mop that he had in common with his brother, the only thing he had in common with his brother, and stuttered to himself. The sea green eyed, Chrome was the more sensitive of the two. He gave riding lessons to townies down at the bike shop. He was the only one willing to. Gas was a mechanic there and ruthlessly prodded him about helping them. Continue reading

#TeaserTues – Her Unexpected Life, Excerpt Take 6

This major tense rewrite is complete.

Her Unexpected Life

I was almost ready to publish this for pre-order and then I decided to rewrite it. I had went out on a limb and wrote it in present tense. After much thought and advice  I decided to change it.

This version needs to run through my editor. So typos may be present.

Past versions

Her Unexpected Life 8-16-16

Her Unexpected Life 6-14-16

Her Unexpected Life 5-3-16

Her Unexpected Life 3-25-16
Her Unexpected Life – 12-15-15

Chapter One-End of January

 

Valerie Cooper’s cell phone jingled to life in the middle of the pop aisle at her local Hugemart. Swiping her finger across the screen, she read the text from her husband. I’m moving out.

Ha! Auto-correct, the technological version of that telephone game the kids play. Valerie’s thumbs wrestled with the touch screen of her phone to send her reply. I think auto-correct got you. Lol! She tossed her phone back in her purse and moved on to the next aisle where she was greeted by the scent of roses. Umm. I love the scent of roses.

Moments later, a few cheerful jingles announced his response. No. It didn’t. I’m moving out of the house, and in with Wendy.

The corners of Valerie’s eyes crinkled and she pursed her lips as she waited for the punch line in this bizarre joke of her husband’s. Curtis, as far as jokes go, this one sucks, babe. She didn’t throw her phone back in her purse this time. Instead, she stood fixed in the aisle, almost rooted to the spot while waiting on his retort. The humor of his joke must have been over her head. Continue reading

#TeaserTues – Her Unexpected Life Excerpt Take 5

Round Five? Edits are complete

her-unexpected-lifeI’m so close to publishing this.

I decided to not dwell on the name I’m publishing under and to focus on just getting it ready. I sent it back to my editor and got it in .mobi form to send to my betas readers. It looks so good on my kindle app.

I wanted to share the most up to date version of this with you on Tuesday but it’s my youngest’s week to drag mom around town without her sister. So, I was being held hostage at a fast food play place with no laptop because mommy is always working on that thing. I’m sharing now and will back date it for Tuesday. I love the back dating option.

Her Unexpected Life 6-14-16

Her Unexpected Life 5-3-16

Her Unexpected Life 3-25-16
Her Unexpected Life – 12-15-15

Chapter One-End of January

Valerie Cooper’s cell phone jingles to life in the middle of the pop aisle at her local Hugemart. Swiping her finger across the screen, she reads the text from her husband. I’m moving out.

Ha! Auto-correct, the technological version of that telephone game the kids play. Valerie’s thumbs wrestle with the touch screen of her phone to send her reply. I think auto-correct got you. Lol! She tosses her phone back in her purse and moves on to the next aisle where she is greeted by the scent of roses. Umm. I love the scent of roses.

Moments later, a few cheerful jingles announce his response. No. It didn’t. I’m moving out of the house, and in with Wendy.

The corners of Valerie’s eyes crinkle and she purses her lips as she waits for the punch line in this bizarre joke of her husband’s. Curtis, as far as jokes go, this one sucks, babe. She doesn’t throw her phone back in her purse this time. Instead, she stands fixed in the aisle, almost rooted to the spot while waiting on his retort. The humor of his joke must be over her head. Continue reading

#TeaserTues – Vested in Her

IllictI wanted to share a little sneak peak of my current Camp NANO project.

The title is a work in progress. And this is an unedited first draft. Other than that enjoy.

Vested in Her – Chapter One

Haven bounces over the cracked linoleum floor to the beeping oven to retrieve the surprise she had baked for her friends. They were all crowded around a small table in her parents kitchen.

“Haven, that smells like heaven. You’re going to make some guy a great old lady one day.” Chrome said.

Gas smiled and laughed. “We all know that won’t be you Chrome.”

All the guys around the table burst into laughter. Continue reading

#TeaserTues – Her Unexpected Life Excerpt Edited-4

Her Unexpected Life

Round Four Edits

Her Unexpected Life 5-3-16

Her Unexpected Life 3-25-16
Her Unexpected Life – 12-15-15

Chapter One-End of January

Valerie Cooper’s cell phone jingles to life in the middle of the pop aisle at her local Hugemart. Swiping her finger across the screen, she reads the text from her husband. ‘I’m moving out.’

Ha! Auto-correct, the technological version of that telephone game the kids play. Valerie’s thumbs wrestle with the touch screen of her phone to send her reply. ‘I think auto-correct got you. Lol!’ She tosses her phone back in her purse and moves on to the next isle where she is greeted by the scent of roses. I love roses.

Moments later a few cheerful jingles announce his response. ‘No. It didn’t. I’m moving out of the house, and in with Wendy.’ Continue reading

My #1linewed – Pretty

Pretty

My #1linewed from my #wip #OutoftheBlue.

He stands in the doorway, looking at the most beautiful woman he has ever seen.

He’s still a dude, though; pretty girls turn our heads.

 

#TeaserTues – Her Unexpected Life Excerpt Edited-3

Her Unexpected Life

As I’ve mentioned before I’m doing some edits.

I know some of you have read this before. If you have a minute give it another read in its updated form.

Her Unexpected Life 3-25-16
Her Unexpected Life – 12-15-15

Chapter One-End of January

In the middle of the pop isle at her local Hugemart, Valerie Cooper receives a text from her husband. ‘I’m moving out.’

Ha! Auto-correct, the technological version of that game telephone the girls play. Valerie’s thumbs wrestle with the touch screen of her phone to send her reply. ‘I think auto-correct got you. Lol!’ She tosses her phone back in her purse and moves on to the next isle.

A few cheerful jingles later announces his reply. ‘No, it didn’t. I’m moving out and in with Wendy.’

Continue reading

My #1linewed – Nod

Nod

My #1linewed from my #wip #OutoftheBlue.

With a nod in Boone’s direction Drake introduces him.

Squealing with delight, Callisto nods in agreement.

Jenibelle nods at Callisto and snares her in a hug…

 

My #1linewed – Back

Back

My #1linewed from my #wip #OutoftheBlue.

 

Settling into the backseat she pulls her legs up to her chest as she hunkers hidden in the shadows on the cold leather.

That’s it Banning back to the safety of the mundane.

His musk surrounds her again bringing her yearnings back to the surface.

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#CampNaNo Day Twelve

Well I changed my goal.

I changed it to 74,000.  I made it to 74,479 which is 99% of my original 75,000 goal.  I got 359 words today.  I was 522 words shy but couldn’t find a place I want to add those words.  There’s one potential but I may remove that part.  It’s currently just three sentences and could be a lot more.  But I may remove it completely.

I’m 100% done with my editing goal so I’m done with this project. I won’t touch it for a month now so I can look at it with fresh eyes.

 

#CampNaNo Day Eleven

Great day … so far.

My husband got off work early so he is picking the kids up, giving me more time to work on my project.  I would normally have already rushed out the door.  So, I’m going to do my update now and then find some appetizing morsel to munch on while listening to an audiobook.  If I have more time after my snack before I head to work that will be added to tomorrows tally.

Here it is:  341 words have been added bring my total to 74,119, 98% complete with word count.  Leaving 881 words to write in 19 days.

I’m 76% done with edits, 57,748 words edited is where that number sits.  I have one-quarter left and then I’m done.  Then I’m taking a break.

How are you going to celebrate your Camp Nano win?

#CampNaNo Day Ten

I have nothing to report.

I didn’t get to work on my project at all yesterday.  We got up and immediately got ready to leave and didn’t return home until past time to bathe the kids and get them in bed.

Today I only have a few hours to work so making up the difference probably won’t happen.

#CampNaNo Day Nine

I inch along.

574 is my word count for the day.  I’m at 98% of my word goal.  I’m amazed I make any progress.  I feel like I delete as many words as I add.

I caved on my decision to not type up the scene for the idea that keeps swimming around in my head.  I typed it up last night.  I have more to write on it but it’ll have to wait for now.

I’m up to 65% done in my total edit count.  It makes me feel ahead of schedule.  That’s good with kids, the unexpected happens often.

#CampNaNo Day Eight

 I’m getting there.

My count today is 461 words. Go me, go me!  I don’t toot my own horn often.  But I’m excited about my progress.

I have over 50% of it edited which is my real goal, the word count is a bonus.  The cherry on top.

How’s Camp NaNo going for you?

#CampNaNo Day Seven

 I have all day to work.

I got 538 words added today!  I finished editing Part One.  That’s 37578 words edited!  Tomorrow I get to start on Part Two.

I would have got more but off to work I have to go.